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Simon满分大作文详解1【雅思考官Simon满分作文传送门系列】

Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官,由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议,甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手,非常地道,言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比,着实让人眼前一亮。小站的Phoebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文,所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华,相信大家都可以扔掉模板,写出高分作文!

今天我们来看一篇大作文,题目是:

Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be?

Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

为什么人们更喜欢外国电影?政府应该支持本土电影吗?Simon管这种题目叫“Two-Part Question”,并且建议大家这种文章要写成四段,每段具体内容:

1. Introduction: topic + general answer to both questions

2. Answer the first question

3. Answer the second question

4. Conclusion: paraphrase the answer you gave in the introduction

Simon说,Introduction段可以只写两句,第一句引入主题,第二句表明立场。如:It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making by subsidizing the industry.

第二段和第三段为主体段落,Simon建议大家每段各写五句话,写之前大家可以发散一下思维,简要列出每一句的论据分别写什么。下面是Simon给出的每段的大纲:

First main paragraph: Why could this be?

1. Topic sentence - several reasons

2. First reason - budgets for action, special effects, spectacular locations

3. Example - Hollywood blockbusters like Avatar or James Bond films

4. Second reason - the most famous actors, actresses and directors

5. Final reason - poor quality local filmmaking in many countries

Second main paragraph: Should governments give financial support?

1. Topic sentence - governments should support local film industries

2. Explain why - talented local film-makers need opportunities

3. Explain more - they need money to pay film crews, actors etc.

4. Explain consequences - would lead to employment, income, tourism

5. Example - invent an example about your country!

想好这五点之后,就很容易把这五句话串连成一个段落了,来看看Simon是如何将大纲中的词汇短语转化成一个个完整的句子的:There are several reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly, the established film industries in certain countries have huge budgets for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and their global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they are made by the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.

结论段Simon是这样写的

In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.

我们可以看出:1,结论段是在改述Introduction段; 2,他在结论段中有改两个Part的顺序——先说Financial Support再说外国电影的流行。对于不知道结尾段落该写什么的同学,这两点可以是非常好的借鉴。

接下来Phoebe老师就帮大家贴出完整版的满分作文供大家参考背诵:

It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making by subsidizing the industry.

There are various reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly, the established film industries in certain countries have huge budgets for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and their global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they are made by the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.